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the line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

the line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000 K8P1
The line graph illustrates the Australian teenagers who consumed three varieties of fast foods from the year 1975 to 2000. Initially, adolescents who ate pizza was almost three times in that period, moreover there has been a slight difference with hamburgers, but the consumption of fish and chips accounts 100 times the year which was the popular snack eaten by most teenagers. However, following years indicates that children desired the predilection over for hamburgers and pizza whereas the consumption has augmented significantly till the start of 20th century. While in the period of 1985, the fish and chips as well as the hamburgers intersected at 90 times the year. Similarly, the puberty who has eaten pizza, fish, and chips meets the same rate. In general the teenagers seems to abominate the fish and chips where the graph has dropped almost 60 times over the 15 years.
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which was the popular snack eaten by most
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, following years indicates that children desired the predilection over for hamburgers and pizza whereas the consumption has augmented
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of 20th century.

While in the period of 1985, the fish and chips
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as the hamburgers intersected at 90
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the
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, the puberty who has eaten pizza, fish, and chips meets the same rate.
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seems to abominate the fish and chips where the graph has dropped almost 60
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IELTS academic the line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

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