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This given graph shows that use of internet among male and female in Canada 2000

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The given bar graph compares the percentage of males and females, of 15-24 age group, who used the Internet for various purposes in Canada in 2000. It is manifest from the graph that the least percentage of both genders used the Internet for research and education. It is clear from the graph that the maximum number of men used the Internet for goods and services (71%). The second most popular use among the males was for sending e-mails (70%). A slightly higher percentage of women (71%) used the Internet for e-mails. However, a significantly lesser percentage (61%) of women used the Internet for goods and services. Chat rooms were almost equally popular among both genders with 50% males and 48% females using the internet for this purpose respectively. Online shopping was more popular among women. 38% women used the net for this purpose and only 28% men used the Internet for online shopping. Games were slightly more popular among males (64%) than females (58%). Research and education was the least popular activity among both men and women. 9% women and 13 % men used the Internet for this purpose. Overall, it can be seen that women were ahead of men in using the internet for e-mailing and online shopping. In all other given activities, males superseded women.
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IELTS academic This given graph shows that use of internet among male and female in Canada 2000

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