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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. GkyB
The line graph illustrates how changes fast food consumption habits of Australian Teenagers between 1975 and 2000. Overall, in this chart, three different fast food products are defined according to the number of times eaten per year. These products are fish and chips pizza and hamburger. Over this period of 25 years, the rate of eating hamburger and pizza increased while the rate of fish and chips went down. Firstly, this chart shows obviously that fish and chips was the most popular fast food than pizza and hamburger in 1975 although it fluctuated between 1975 and 1985. This popularity started to decrease after 1985. Fish and chips was consumed approximately 100 times a year by Australian teenager in 1985 while this rate decreased under just 40 in 2000. Despite the fact that pizza and hamburger was eaten by Australian teenagers in 1975, they were not trending as fish and chips. The number of times eaten per year of pizza mounted up from 1975 to 1985 and reach a plateau between 1995 and 2000. Consumption of hamburger rose slowly between 1975 and 1995. Pizza and hamburger steady between 1995 and 2000. Hamburger was eaten 100 times a year whereas pizza was consumed nearly 80 times a year.
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food consumption habits of Australian
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Teenagers
between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
, in this chart, three
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different
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fast
food products
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eaten
per
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year
. These products are fish and chips pizza and hamburger. Over this period of 25 years, the rate of eating hamburger and pizza increased while the rate of fish and chips went down.

Firstly
, this chart
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shows
obviously
that fish and chips was the most popular
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fast
food than pizza and hamburger in 1975 although it fluctuated between 1975 and 1985. This popularity
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started
to decrease after 1985. Fish and chips
was consumed
approximately 100
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times
a
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year
by Australian
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teenager
in 1985 while this rate decreased under
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just
40 in 2000.

Despite the fact that pizza and hamburger was
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eaten
by Australian
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teenagers
in 1975, they were not trending as fish and chips. The number of
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times
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eaten
per
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year
of pizza mounted up from 1975 to 1985 and reach a plateau between 1995 and 2000. Consumption of hamburger rose
slowly
between 1975 and 1995. Pizza and hamburger steady between 1995 and 2000. Hamburger was
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eaten
100
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times
a
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year
whereas pizza
was consumed
nearly
80
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times
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year
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

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