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The line diagram shows the demand of electricity in winter and summer for a particular city. the pie chart shows the percentage of electricity use in the households. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line diagram shows the demand of electricity in winter and summer for a particular city. the pie chart shows the percentage of electricity use in the households. 56k5V
The graphs show how during the winter the demand for electricity is higher than in summer. If we carry out an in-depth analysis we can see during the nights in winter, the units of electricity raise compared to all daily hours. On the other hand, the energy increase is notorious at half-day hours and night in summer. It is important to mention the main activities that electricity is used for are heating rooms and heating water that embraces more than half of electricity consumption. Additionally, there are other activities no less important that comprise the other half of electricity consumption, for example, the use of ovens, lighting, or vacuum cleaners. In conclusion, it makes sense that during the winter the use of electricity is higher than in summer, the use of heating rooms and heating water could be the main reason for this result.
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how during the winter the demand for
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electricity
is higher than in summer. If we carry out an in-depth analysis we can
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during the nights in winter, the units of
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electricity
raise compared to all daily hours.
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, the energy increase is notorious at half-day hours and night in summer.

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to mention the main activities that
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electricity
is
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for are
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heating
rooms and
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heating
water that embraces more than half of
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electricity
consumption.

Additionally
, there are other activities no less
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important
that comprise the other half of
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electricity
consumption,
for example
, the
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use
of ovens, lighting, or vacuum cleaners.

In conclusion
, it
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makes
sense that during the winter the
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use
of
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electricity
is higher than in summer, the
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use
of
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heating
rooms and
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heating
water could be the main reason for this result.
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IELTS academic The line diagram shows the demand of electricity in winter and summer for a particular city. the pie chart shows the percentage of electricity use in the households.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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