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The line graph demonstrates that the average amount of money females earned as a proportion of male's earnings in the USA from 1975 to 2005.

The line graph demonstrates that the average amount of money females earned as a proportion of male's earnings in the USA from 1975 to 2005. yXLDP
The line graph demonstrates that the average amount of money females earned as a proportion of male's earnings in the USA from 1975 to 2005. The lines represent the age gaps as 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45-54 years. Between 1980 and 1985 the proportion of earning in every age interval was sharply increasing. After 1985, the proportion of women who are 16-24 years was slowly increasing. The highest ratio belonged to women who are 16-24 years from 1975 to 2005. The 16-24 years women's weekly earnings became 90% of men's wages between 1986 to 2005. Although, the rate of women who are 45-54 years, is the lowest proportion from 1975 to 1998. After 1998, the lowest proportion became women who are 35-44 years until 2005. The 45-54 years women's weekly earnings became 55% of men's wages in 1980. Overall, the lowest percentages of every age gaps were in 1975. After that time, the percentages of every lines stared to increase until 2005.
The line graph demonstrates that the average amount of money females earned as a
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proportion
of male's
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earnings
in the USA from 1975 to 2005. The lines represent the age gaps as 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45-54 years.

Between 1980 and 1985 the
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proportion
of
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earning
in every age interval was
sharply
increasing. After 1985, the
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proportion
of
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women
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who
are 16-24 years was
slowly
increasing. The highest ratio belonged to
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women
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who
are 16-24 years from 1975 to 2005. The 16-24 years women's weekly
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earnings
became 90% of
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men
's wages
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between 1986 to 2005
.

Although, the rate of
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women
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who
are 45-54 years, is the lowest
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proportion
from 1975 to 1998. After 1998, the lowest
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proportion
became
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women
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who
are 35-44 years until 2005. The 45-54 years women's weekly
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earnings
became 55% of
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men
's wages in 1980.

Overall
, the lowest percentages of every age gaps were in 1975. After that time, the percentages of every
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lines
stared to increase until 2005.
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IELTS academic The line graph demonstrates that the average amount of money females earned as a proportion of male's earnings in the USA from 1975 to 2005.

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