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The line charts give information about the demand for steel and number of workers employed in a country from January to December.

The line charts give information about the demand for steel and number of workers employed in a country from January to December. 95xYr

There are two line graphs are shown in the picture. These graphs are about the demand for steel and the number of workers employed. According to them, there is information that has to be described from January to December in dimension between 0 and 6000 million tons or thousands of workers. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there are two lines of an actual demand of tones and an amount of produced steel. The former line starts from 4000 in January, improves by 5000, then declines until 3000 in August and after a one more alteration finishes at 900 million tones. Draw to your attention that the actual demand starts and finishes at 2000. The number of workers employed starts from 5000 and then stably declines until 1000000 of workers. To sum up everything that has been stated so far, I would say that the line that show an amount of produced steel is similar to the second graph's line and an actual demand is less than the the amount of produced steel.

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