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The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever. Discuss both points of view, and give your opinion.

The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever. 8pNm
The given pie charts eludicate the information about reasons of MBA graduates to chose their degree, and what is their most important value, considered by employers. Overall, at first glance it is evident that better job opportunities is mostly considered by individuals to take MBA degree. Subsequently, knowledge and personality are two most-crucial factors for employers to value them. Regarding reasons for pursuing MBA program, 65% of graduatees chose MBA due to higher posibillity to get great jobs in the future. This number notably is listed more than a half of survey respondents. Following this, the desire to have abillity to assist others (15%) and to improve personal development (12%) are in the subsequent positions respectively, having the smaller percentages compared to the reason for better job opportunity. Interestingly, merely 8% of graduatee does MBA because they want to help others. Turning to the value considered by employers, their personality and knowledge will have the highest percentage, listed at 25% both. This is followed by appearance and connections, which are valued at 20%. Lastly, qualification will be only considered for 10% of total measurement.
The
given
pie charts
eludicate
the information about reasons of MBA graduates to chose their degree, and what is their most
important
value,
considered
by employers.

Overall
, at
first
glance it is evident that better job opportunities is
mostly
considered
by individuals to take MBA degree.
Subsequently
, knowledge and personality are two most-crucial factors for employers to value them.

Regarding reasons for pursuing MBA program, 65% of
graduatees
chose MBA due to higher
posibillity
to
get
great jobs in the future. This number
notably
is listed
more than a half of survey respondents. Following this, the desire to have
abillity
to assist others (15%) and to
improve
personal development (12%) are in the subsequent positions
respectively
, having the smaller percentages compared to the reason for better job opportunity.
Interestingly
,
merely
8% of
graduatee
does MBA
because
they want to
help
others.

Turning to the value
considered
by employers, their personality and knowledge will have the highest percentage, listed at 25% both. This
is followed
by appearance and connections, which
are valued
at 20%.
Lastly
, qualification will be
only
considered
for 10% of total measurement.
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IELTS academic The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever.

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