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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand , it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements.

The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. with these statements. 2br8A
We live in an era where technology is ubiquitous. This year more than ever we have experienced on ourselves how difficult it can be to stay connected to real life, not having an ethernet wire and a computer in our houses. With the arrival of the World Pandemic from Covid19, the school world, and the students themselves are those who have most felt, together with the workers, the influence of this tool. Many of them had to get it, others already had it in the house. After a year, returning to the same houses, we can see how all this social distancing has heavily influenced our lives and those around us. Many young people have taken to the streets, to protest against DAD - a form of distance education that is not bringing results. According to the facts, many presented recurring headaches and lack of attention, precisely because distance teaching favors this type of distractions. On the other hand, the protest comes from the parents, who say they are desperate and exhausted, from this academic year. The result of DAD has led many of them to have to stay at home, so that they can look after their children, and not be able to work. Many of them in fact cannot be practicing smart working, and here is where the unemployment rate increases. I think the use of this tool is fair if moderated. We cannot afford to pass the time on the hands, in front of an object of not even 20 gr. Life has to be bitten off the screen. This year I rediscovered how important it is the hug of a friend, the smile of a parent, and the joy that we have in our eyes when we are all gathered around the same table, between laughter and chatter.
We
live
in an era where technology is ubiquitous. This
year
more than ever we have experienced on ourselves how difficult it can be to stay connected to real life, not having an
ethernet
wire and a computer in our
houses
. With the arrival of the World Pandemic from
Covid19
, the school world, and the students themselves are those who have most felt, together with the workers, the influence of this tool.
Many
of them had to
get
it, others already had it in the
house
. After a
year
, returning to the same
houses
, we can
see
how all this social distancing has
heavily
influenced our
lives
and those around us.
Many
young
people
have taken to the streets, to protest against DAD
-
a form of distance education
that is
not bringing results. According to the facts,
many
presented recurring headaches and lack of attention,
precisely
because
distance teaching favors this type of distractions.

On the other hand
, the protest
comes
from the parents, who say they are desperate and exhausted, from this academic
year
. The result of DAD has led
many
of them to
have to
stay at home,
so
that they can look after their children, and not be able to work.
Many
of them in fact cannot be practicing smart working, and here is where the unemployment rate increases.

I
think
the
use
of this tool is
fair
if moderated. We cannot afford to pass the time on the hands, in front of an object of not even 20 gr. Life
has to
be bitten
off the screen. This
year
I rediscovered how
important
it is the hug of a friend, the smile of a parent, and the joy that we have in our eyes when we are all gathered around the same table, between laughter and chatter.
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IELTS academic The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. with these statements.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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