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The information regarding the travellers who used different three mean of transport went outside from town between 2012 to 2015 has depicted in the graph. At first glance, in 2000 Bara 80% of travellers visited by train, visitors used bus and trains which accounted for about 50% and exactly 20%. 10% people travelled by train in 2013 and in same here four-time more in a portion who visited by bus, but the ratio of the tram was about 20%. Observing further, in 2015, people who travelled by train and bus shared a negligible difference and which was mere 2%, while the percentage of the tram was at a peak with the figure of near hundred per cent. The number of people visiting by train was around 35%, whilst exactly 10 and above half percent people travelled by bus and tram respectively. Overall, the number of passengers using tram saw the biggest growth, additionally the figure for train passengers decreased over the period.

The information regarding the travellers who used different three mean of transport went outside from town between 2012 to 2015 has depicted in the graph. At first glance, in 2000 Bara 80% of travellers visited by train, visitors used bus and trains which accounted for about 50% and exactly 20%. 10% people travelled by train in 2013 and in same here four-time more in a portion who visited by bus, but the ratio of the tram was about 20%. Observing further, in 2015, people who travelled by train and bus shared a negligible difference and which was mere 2%, while the percentage of the tram was at a peak with the figure of near hundred per cent. The number of people visiting by train was around 35%, whilst exactly 10 and above half percent people travelled by bus and tram respectively. Overall, the number of passengers using tram saw the biggest growth, additionally the figure for train passengers decreased over the period. doVbp
The information regarding the travellers who used different three mean of transport went outside from town between 2012 to 2015 has depicted in the graph. At first glance, in 2000 Bara 80% of travellers visited by train, visitors used bus and trains which accounted for about 50% and exactly 20%. 10% people travelled by train in 2013 and in same here four-time more in a portion who visited by bus, but the ratio of the tram was about 20%. Observing further, in 2015, people who travelled by train and bus shared a negligible difference and which was mere 2%, while the percentage of the tram was at a peak with the figure of near hundred per cent. The number of people visiting by train was around 35%, whilst exactly 10 and above half percent people travelled by bus and tram respectively. Overall, the number of passengers using tram saw the biggest growth, additionally the figure for train passengers decreased over the period.
The information regarding the
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travellers
who
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used
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different
three
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mean
of transport went outside from town
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between 2012 to 2015
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first
glance, in 2000
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Bara
80% of
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travellers
visited by
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train
, visitors
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used
bus and
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trains
which accounted for about 50% and exactly 20%. 10%
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people
travelled by
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train
in 2013 and in same here four-time more in a portion who visited by bus,
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but
the ratio of the tram was about 20%.

Observing
further
, in 2015,
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people
who travelled by
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train
and bus shared a negligible difference and which was mere 2%, while the percentage of the tram was at a peak with the figure of near hundred per cent. The number of
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people
visiting by
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train
was around 35%, whilst exactly 10 and above half percent
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people
travelled by bus and tram
respectively
.

Overall
, the number of passengers using tram
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saw
the biggest growth,
additionally
the figure for
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train
passengers decreased over the period.
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IELTS academic The information regarding the travellers who used different three mean of transport went outside from town between 2012 to 2015 has depicted in the graph. At first glance, in 2000 Bara 80% of travellers visited by train, visitors used bus and trains which accounted for about 50% and exactly 20%. 10% people travelled by train in 2013 and in same here four-time more in a portion who visited by bus, but the ratio of the tram was about 20%. Observing further, in 2015, people who travelled by train and bus shared a negligible difference and which was mere 2%, while the percentage of the tram was at a peak with the figure of near hundred per cent. The number of people visiting by train was around 35%, whilst exactly 10 and above half percent people travelled by bus and tram respectively. Overall, the number of passengers using tram saw the biggest growth, additionally the figure for train passengers decreased over the period.

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