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The infographic illustrates the popularity of different holiday activities according to British senior high school students in 2003.

The infographic illustrates the popularity of different holiday activities according to British senior high school students in 2003. JKR7a
The infographic illustrates the popularity of different holiday activities according to British senior high school students in 2003. As is observed, there were more girls participating in the investigation than boys. In addition, the most frequent activities for the female students during the vacation were reading, shopping and resting while that of the male students was playing sports. With regard to the reading sector, there were 16 girls involved during the holiday entitlement, outnumbering that of boys. Likewise, the number of girls hanging out and buying products is 25, which is three times higher than the figure of boys. Similarly, while only more than 10 male students took a rest or slept during the holiday, there were approximately 30 girls doing these activities. On the contrary, boys played sports more vigorously than girls. This can be concluded from the given illustration showing that the number of boys taking part in physical activities is around 32, which is 4 times higher than that of girls. In remaining activities, namely self-education, gardening and watching movies, both male and female high-schoolers joined in quite equally.
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according to British senior high school
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students
in 2003.

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, there were more
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girls
participating in the investigation than
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boys
.
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, the most frequent
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activities
for the female
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students
during the vacation were reading, shopping and resting while that of the male
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students
was playing sports.

With regard to the reading sector, there were 16
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girls
involved during the holiday entitlement, outnumbering that of
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boys
.
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, the number of
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girls
hanging out and buying products is 25, which is three times higher than the figure of
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boys
.
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more than 10 male
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took a rest or slept during the holiday, there were approximately 30
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girls
doing these activities.

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,
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boys
played sports more
vigorously
than
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girls
. This can
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illustration showing that the number of
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boys
taking part in physical
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activities
is around 32, which is 4 times higher than that of
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girls
. In remaining
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activities
,
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self-education, gardening and watching movies, both male and female high-schoolers
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joined
in quite
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IELTS academic The infographic illustrates the popularity of different holiday activities according to British senior high school students in 2003.

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