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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of consumption of pop music albums by British citizens among different genders and four distinct age groups. As transparent from the chart, the albums are mainly purchased by men customers (30%), which is 10% higher than the proportion that British women consume. Also noteworthy is that music products as albums are mostly sole to adults group, whose age ranges from 25 to under 45 years old. In details, there are figures of consumptions of four group presented in the chart. The smallest purchasing proportion belongs to the group of people that are over 45 years old. By contrast, the consumer that was around 25 to 34 years old contributes the highest proportion of the total of albums sole, followed by the group of the consumers between 25 to 34 years old with approximately 30% and consumer aged between 35 to 44 with 28% of the total consumption of music albums in Britain.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of consumption of pop music
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albums
by British citizens among
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different
genders and four distinct age groups.

As transparent from the chart, the
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albums
are
mainly
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purchased
by
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men
customers (30%), which is 10% higher than the proportion that British women consume.
Also
noteworthy is that music products as
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albums
are
mostly
sole to adults
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group
, whose age ranges from 25 to under 45 years
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old
.

In
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details
, there are figures of consumptions of four
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group
presented in the chart. The smallest purchasing proportion belongs to the
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group
of
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people
that are over 45 years
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old
. By contrast, the consumer that was around 25 to 34 years
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old
contributes the highest proportion of the total of
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albums
sole, followed by the
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group
of the consumers between 25 to 34 years
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old
with approximately 30% and consumer aged between 35 to 44 with 28% of the total consumption of music
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albums
in Britain.

IELTS academic The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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3 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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