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The graphs below show the type of music albumb purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below.

The graphs below show the type of music albumb purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below. OpNN
The rendered graph illustrates about the information people purchased music album s in Britain according to sex and age. Overall, as a general observation people were buying three types of music like, pop music, rock music, classical music. It is noticeable, that the proportion of males who bought pop music was 25%, while female percentage was 12%. it is worth noticing that pop music was highly prefered by people of 25-34 age group 31%. interestingly, the percentage of senior citizen was least in case of pop music and rock music only 8%bought rock music albums 9%purchased pop music.
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album s in Britain according to sex and age.
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people
were buying three types of
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like, pop
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, rock
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, classical
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. It is noticeable, that the proportion of males who
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pop
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was 25%, while female percentage was 12%.
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of 25-34 age group 31%.
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and rock
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music
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albums 9%
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the type of music albumb purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below.

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  American English
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98 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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