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The line graph illustrates the sales value of four products for each month of 2009.

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The line graph illustrates the sales value of four products for each month of 2009. It is very clear from the overall trend that, the value of sales for product A and C went up over the period, whereas the sales value of product B steadily decreased. While the other three products had changes in the value of sales throughout the year, the sales value of product D remained the same. In January of 2009, the sales value of product B was the highest, being valued at 50 thousands of Dollars and then gradually decreased over the next eight months to reach 25 thousands of Dollars in August, in the following months, the figure remained stable approximately at 25 thousand Dollars At the beginning of the year value of sales for products A and C were the lowest, reaching only 10 thousand Dollars and then it sharply increased, reaching 50000 Dollars by the end of the year and becoming the most popular product.
The line graph illustrates the
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of four
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for each month of 2009.

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for
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A and C went up over the period, whereas the
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of
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B
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had
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in the
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of
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throughout the year, the
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of
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D remained the same.

In
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January of 2009
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B was the highest,
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50 thousands of
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and then
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decreased over the
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25 thousands of
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in August, in the following months, the figure remained stable approximately at 25 thousand Dollars

At the beginning of the year
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for
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A and C were the lowest, reaching
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10 thousand
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and then it
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increased, reaching 50000
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by the
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the sales value of four products for each month of 2009.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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