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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graphs inform the reader about the registrations of students from abroad and domestic ones in Australian universitites from 2001 to 2010. To begin with, it is obvious that the number of those that began their studies was different in comparison with the total proportion. More specifally, the former increased from 20000 students to approximately 40000 students between 2001 and 2004, while an upward trend was noticed concerning the latter from 2001 to 2006. Moreover, an upward trend was observed from 2004 and for the next four years concerning the number of total students, while an increase was seen from 2006 to 2009 regarding the proportion of those who started their studies, reaching a plateau at 40000 students until the end of the decade. On the other hand, the number of local students differed concerning the active students and the total number of them. More particularly, the number of active students showed an increase from 2001 to 2002 and for the next six years, a downward trend was observed. Between 2008 and 2010, a decline was seen. On the other hand, the number of total students soared from 2001 to 2007, reaching a plateau at 60000 students between 2008 and 2010. All in all, it seems that the proportion of active students all over the years was less compared with the total in both cases, either overseas or local ones.
The graphs inform the reader about the registrations of
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from abroad and domestic ones in Australian
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from 2001 to 2010.

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with, it is obvious that the
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number
of those that began their studies was
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different
in comparison
with the
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total
proportion. More
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specifally
, the former increased from 20000
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students
to approximately 40000
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students
between 2001 and 2004, while an upward trend
was noticed
concerning the latter from 2001 to 2006.
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, an upward trend
was observed
from 2004 and for the
next
four years concerning the
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number
of
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total
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students
, while an increase was
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seen
from 2006 to 2009 regarding the proportion of those who
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started
their studies, reaching a plateau at 40000
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students
until the
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end
of the decade.

On the other hand
, the
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number
of local
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students
differed concerning the active
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students
and the
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total
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number
of them. More
particularly
, the
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number
of active
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students
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showed
an increase from 2001 to 2002 and for the
next
six years, a downward trend
was observed
. Between 2008 and 2010, a decline was
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seen
.
On the other hand
, the
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number
of
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total
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students
soared from 2001 to 2007, reaching a plateau at 60000
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students
between 2008 and 2010.

All in all, it seems that the proportion of active
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students
all over the years was less compared with the
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total
in both cases, either overseas or local ones.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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