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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates, about the admissions in Australian Universities among National and international students during the period of 2001 to 2010. Firstly, Local students started enrolling around 18, 000 during 2001. Further, it raised almost 22, 000 the next year, but, started decling from 2003 until 2007, and, got steady during this year equal to 2003. There is a flucation during the 2007 to 2008 and got almost equal with 2002 with 22, 000. Although, there is a decree in Commencing, but, total graduates surge upto 60, 000 during the time period of 2007, and then there is a period stability till 2010. Secondly, Overseas starts just with 50 percent, but there is a skyrocket over the ten years. The commencements, reached half that of regional students. And, the total number of students with 20, 000 less than that of local habitants. There is a rise in overall people during these years. The Foreign students rise 81, 000 whereas, local schlors just with 60, 000.
The line graph illustrates, about the admissions in Australian Universities among National and international
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during the period of 2001 to 2010.

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enrolling around 18, 000 during 2001.
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from 2003 until 2007, and,
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steady during this
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equal to 2003. There is a
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2007 to 2008 and
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almost equal with 2002 with 22, 000. Although, there is a decree in Commencing,
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, total graduates surge
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60, 000 during the time period of 2007, and then there is a period stability till 2010.

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with 50 percent,
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there is a skyrocket over the ten years. The commencements, reached half that of regional
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students
. And, the total number of
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with 20, 000 less than that of local habitants. There is a rise in
overall
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people
during these years. The Foreign
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rise 81, 000 whereas, local
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with 60, 000.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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