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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. moQ8
The following two charts demonstrate the variation during a ten-year enlistment of foreign and local students to Australian universities from the years 2001 to 2010. The first diagram illustrates the entrance of overseas students accepted in Australia, which showed that the tendency quadrupled over ten years for the total alumni. Moreover, the number of new students also increased twice the number of 20 000 they had at the beginning of 2001. In regard to the second graph for local students, the acceptance ratio showed little variation and no noticeable increase at the end of the decade. Similarly, the total number of students demonstrated a sudden peak for the first seven years until reaching a flat line for the last three years. In general, the amount of enrolled local students dominated and had a one-third increase from the initial number of 40 000. Overall, it can be observed that overseas students increased their enrollment rate during a gap of ten years in comparison to local students whose admission tended to decrease.
The following two charts demonstrate the variation during a ten-year enlistment of foreign and
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local
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students
to Australian universities from the years 2001 to 2010.

The
first
diagram illustrates the entrance of overseas
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students
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accepted
in Australia, which
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showed
that the tendency quadrupled over ten years for the total alumni.
Moreover
, the
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number
of new
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students
also
increased twice the
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number
of 20 000 they had at the beginning of 2001.

In regard to the second graph for
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local
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, the acceptance ratio
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showed
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little
variation and no noticeable increase at the
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end
of the decade.
Similarly
, the total
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number
of
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students
demonstrated a sudden peak for the
first
seven years until reaching a flat line for the last three years.
In general
, the amount of enrolled
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local
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students
dominated and had a one-third increase from the initial
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number
of 40 000.

Overall
, it can
be observed
that overseas
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students
increased their enrollment rate during a gap of ten years
in comparison
to
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local
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students
whose admission tended to decrease.

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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