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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. PVW52
The graph illustrates the number of students applying to other countries and the students enrolling to local universities in Australia in the years 2001 and 2010. Overall, in the first graph, it can be seen that students enrolled for overseas are increased gradually. In comparison, other graph shows that in the beginning it fluctuated and by the ending it is almost same as beginning, whereas in total the graph showed an gradual increase and remained constant. Firstly, students enrolling for overseas began at approximately 12000 in 2001 and increased gradually up to 2009(by 40000 enrollments respectively). Then, it maintained a steady state with 40000 enrolments by 2010. However, in total the fluctuations were in the beginning up to 2004 and increased steadily until 2008 with more than 60000. Finally, it began to fluctuate and by the end of 2010 it reached almost 81000. In the second graph, the students enrollments began with nearly 190000 in 2001 and reached almost 230000 by 2002. Then, it started to fell dramatically up to 2006 up to nearly 200000 and started to rise again until 2008 and dropped to 200000by 2010. Yet, in total it started at 400000 in 2001 and have a significant rise up to 2007 and maintained a steady state for 3 years (2010) with 600000 respectively.
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illustrates the number of
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applying to other countries and the
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enrolling to local universities in Australia in the years 2001 and 2010.

Overall
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first
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, it can be
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that
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enrolled for overseas
are increased
gradually
.
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that in the beginning it fluctuated and by the ending it is almost same as beginning, whereas in total the
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gradual increase and remained constant.

Firstly
,
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enrolling for overseas began at approximately 12000 in 2001 and increased
gradually
up to 2009(by 40000 enrollments
respectively
). Then, it maintained a steady state with 40000
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enrolments
by 2010.
However
, in total the fluctuations were in the beginning up to 2004 and increased
steadily
until 2008 with more than 60000.
Finally
, it began to fluctuate and by the
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of 2010 it reached almost 81000.

In the second
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, the
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enrollments began with
nearly
190000 in 2001 and reached almost 230000 by 2002. Then, it
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to fell
dramatically
up to 2006 up to
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200000 and
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to rise again until 2008 and dropped to 200000by 2010.
Yet
, in total it
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at 400000 in 2001 and have a significant rise up to 2007 and maintained a steady state for 3 years (2010) with 600000
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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