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The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Aj38x
The bar chart illustrates how many people were employed in four major industry sectors from 1910 till 2010. Overall, the services industry experienced the fastest growth and by the end of the period employed more people than the other three sectors combined. In contrast, fewer people worked in agriculture, energy and construction, and manufacturing in 2010 than in 1910. The services sector demonstrated a strong upward trend throughout the period. As a result, it had become the largest employer by 1930 with just over 10 million workers and had exceeded the 20 million mark by 2010. Manufacturing, which was the dominant industry at the beginning of the period, continued to grow until 1950 when it peaked at approximately eight million people employed before falling into decline. With regard to the remaining two sectors, agriculture and energy and construction gradually shrank from providing jobs for around 2. 5 and 3. 5 million people respectively in 1910 to under two million each in 2010.
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worked in agriculture, energy and construction, and manufacturing in 2010 than in 1910.

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demonstrated a strong upward trend throughout the period.
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workers and had exceeded the 20
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mark by 2010.

Manufacturing, which was the dominant industry at the beginning of the period, continued to grow until 1950 when it peaked at approximately eight
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010.

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