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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES NUMBER OF undergraduate ENROLLED BY OVERSEAS graduate AND LOCAL junior IN AUSTRALIAN UNIVERSITIES IN A TEN-YEAR PERIOD AND THE SCALE IS Measured IN THOUSANDS. OVERALL, THE ENROLLMENT OF OVERSEAS scholar IS GRADUALLY Increasing FROM LOW TO HIGH. WHERE AS LOCAL junior STARTED WITH GOOD NUMBER INCREASEING AND THE LINE IS STABLE FROM FOUR YEARS. AND COMMENCING IS FLUCTUATED on the contrary AT OTHER SIDE IT ALSO Increasing AND STABILISED FROM TWO YEARS. WITH REGARD TO AS WE OBSERVE THAT IN OVERSEAS PEOPLE IN STARTING OF YEAR 2000 WAS extremely Fewer PEOPLE ARE JOINED on the contrary IN 2010 THE GROWTH WAS VERY GOOD WITH 8000. ON THE OTHER HAND IN THE FIRST YEAR STARTED WITH GRAT 400000 scholar AND a RISE TILL 2007 AND IT IS REMAINED STEADY. THE graduate FROM THE OVERSEAS AS INCREASIND EVERY YEAR AS WE Observed on the contrary THE LOCAL undergraduate ARE PLATUED BY SAME RANGE.
THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES NUMBER OF undergraduate ENROLLED BY
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OVERSEAS
graduate AND LOCAL junior IN AUSTRALIAN UNIVERSITIES IN A TEN-YEAR PERIOD AND THE SCALE
IS Measured
IN THOUSANDS.

OVERALL
, THE ENROLLMENT OF
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OVERSEAS
scholar IS
GRADUALLY
Increasing FROM LOW TO HIGH.
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WHERE AS
LOCAL junior
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STARTED
WITH
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GOOD
NUMBER
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INCREASEING
AND THE LINE IS STABLE FROM FOUR YEARS. AND COMMENCING
IS FLUCTUATED
on the contrary
AT OTHER SIDE IT
ALSO
Increasing AND
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STABILISED
FROM TWO YEARS.

WITH REGARD TO AS WE OBSERVE THAT IN
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OVERSEAS
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PEOPLE
IN STARTING OF
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YEAR
2000 WAS
extremely
Fewer
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PEOPLE
ARE
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JOINED
on the contrary
IN 2010 THE GROWTH WAS
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VERY
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GOOD
WITH 8000.
ON THE OTHER HAND
IN THE
FIRST
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YEAR
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STARTED
WITH
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GRAT
400000 scholar AND a RISE TILL 2007 AND IT
IS REMAINED
STEADY. THE graduate FROM THE
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OVERSEAS
AS
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INCREASIND
EVERY
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YEAR
AS WE Observed
on the contrary
THE LOCAL undergraduate ARE
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PLATUED
BY SAME RANGE.

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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