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The graphs below give information concerning smartphone ownership as a percentage of population in a country from 2000 to 2010, and by level of education for the years 2000 and 2010.

The graphs below give information concerning smartphone ownership as a percentage of population in a country from 2000 to 2010, and by level of education for the years 2000 and 2010. Ky01w
The two bar charts illustrate the rate of the population who was the owner of smartphones in a decade (2000 and 2010) and smartphone ownership by education level in a country. Overall, there was an upward trend in the proportion of mobile phone ownership in Denmark during the shown period. In addition, residents who held a Doctorate degree constituted the highest rate of owning mobile devices over the researched time. In 2000, 40% of Danish possessed mobile devices, which was the lowest. From 2000 to 2004, the ratio of inhabitants holding digital items in this country increased gradually to 52%. Similarly, the period between 2004 and 2010 experienced significant growth in this figure to peak at approximately 85% in the year of 2010. However, the figures for the second chart were totally different. In 2000, the proportion of undergraduates that owned phones was the lowest (about 15%), compared to a three-fold rise to nearly 45% in 2010. In contrast, studying in a higher degree of education, it was shown to increase the rate of owning devices among students. In Ph. D. degree, students with around 75% in 2000 and 90% in 2010 ownership had the higher figure compared to other people who are another lower levels in education.
The two bar charts illustrate the rate of the population who was the owner of smartphones in a decade (2000 and 2010) and smartphone ownership by education level in a country.

Overall
, there was an upward trend in the proportion of mobile phone ownership in Denmark during the shown period.
In addition
, residents who held a Doctorate degree constituted the highest rate of owning mobile devices over the researched time.

In 2000, 40% of Danish possessed mobile devices, which was the lowest. From 2000 to 2004, the ratio of inhabitants holding digital items in this country increased
gradually
to 52%.
Similarly
, the period between 2004 and 2010 experienced significant growth in this figure to peak at approximately 85% in the year of 2010.

However
, the figures for the second chart were
totally
different
. In 2000, the proportion of undergraduates that
owned
phones was the lowest (about 15%), compared to a three-fold rise to
nearly
45% in 2010.
In contrast
, studying in a higher degree of education, it
was shown
to increase the rate of owning devices among students.
In
Ph. D.
degree, students with around 75% in 2000 and 90% in 2010 ownership had the higher figure compared to other
people
who are another lower levels in education.
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IELTS academic The graphs below give information concerning smartphone ownership as a percentage of population in a country from 2000 to 2010, and by level of education for the years 2000 and 2010.

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