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The graph shows usage of different types of fuels between year 1800 to 2000

The graph shows usage of different types of fuels between year 1800 to 2000 75a2k
The assigned graph elucidates how proportion of several kind of fuels varied from 1800 to 2000. Having zeroed in on illustration, wood was the maximum used fuel. Setting of at 100% in year 1800, usage of fuel took a nosedive dramatically to nearly 7% in 1850. Eventually, this category declined to almost negligible in 2000. As far as coal was concerned, usage of fuel soared to about 70% in 1900. As 15 years elapsed the coal usage dwindled to 32% in 2000. Further scrutinizing the chart reveals that gas as well as coal started consuming in the year 1900. As regards gas, utilization demonstrated a soaring trend and this figure reached at 30% gradually. Following this, this consumption of oil notched to 30% and in this heading usage of oil remain stagnated till 32%. In sum and substance oil and Gas clinched the first place. In contrast the usage of wood totally ended.
The assigned graph elucidates how proportion of
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fuels
varied from 1800 to 2000. Having zeroed in on illustration, wood was the maximum
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used
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fuel
. Setting of at 100% in year 1800,
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usage
of
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fuel
took a nosedive
dramatically
to
nearly
7% in 1850.
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, this category declined to almost negligible in 2000. As far as coal
was concerned
,
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usage
of
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fuel
soared to about 70% in 1900.
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As
15 years elapsed the coal
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usage
dwindled to 32% in 2000.
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Further
scrutinizing the chart reveals that gas
as well
as coal
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started
consuming in the year 1900. As regards gas, utilization demonstrated a soaring trend and this figure reached at 30%
gradually
. Following this, this consumption of oil notched to 30% and in this heading
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usage
of oil remain stagnated till 32%. In sum and substance oil and Gas clinched the
first
place. In
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contrast
the
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usage
of wood
totally
ended.
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IELTS academic The graph shows usage of different types of fuels between year 1800 to 2000

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