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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculty of a major university in 2012.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculty of a major university in 2012. MDlL
The bar chart provided information about the rates of men and women working as staff members across seven faculties (Arts, business, education, engineering, law, medicine, science) in a university during 2012. Overall, it is clear that the rate of male employers is higher than that of female workers. Most of the male staff members worked in the engineering department as opposed to the majority of female employers who worked in the faculty of education. Furthermore, the most significant difference in employment between the two genders was in the engineering faculty. In terms of arts, approximately 60% of women worked in this department as opposed to just above 40% of men. Similarly, the rate of ladies working in education was four times higher than the rate of men ( around 80% and 20% respectively). A minimal difference between the rare of male and female employers can be seen in the field of medicine (about 50% and 48% respectively). On the other hand, more males worked in the business field, around 62% as opposed to just under 40% for females. Similarly, 60% of males workers were employed in the law faculty compared to exactly 40% of ladies. A similar difference in proportions of male and female staff members can be observed in the Science department, with around 60% and approximately 40% respectively, in contrast with engineering, which reports a substantial difference between male employers( above 80%) and female workers (marginally less than 20%).
The bar chart provided information about the
rates
of
men
and women working as staff members across seven faculties (Arts, business, education,
engineering
, law, medicine, science) in a university during 2012.

Overall
, it is
clear
that the
rate
of male
employers
is higher than that of
female
workers. Most of the male staff members worked in the
engineering
department as opposed to the majority of
female
employers
who worked in the faculty of education.
Furthermore
, the most significant
difference
in employment between the two genders was in the
engineering
faculty.

In terms of arts, approximately 60% of women worked in this department as opposed to
just
above 40% of
men
.
Similarly
, the
rate
of ladies working in education was four times higher than the
rate
of
men
(
around 80% and 20%
respectively
). A minimal
difference
between
the rare of
male and
female
employers
can be
seen
in the field of medicine (about 50% and 48%
respectively
).

On the other hand
, more
males
worked in the business field, around 62% as opposed to
just
under 40% for
females
.
Similarly
, 60% of
males
workers
were employed
in the law faculty compared to exactly 40% of ladies. A similar
difference
in proportions of male and
female
staff members can
be observed
in the Science department, with around 60% and approximately 40%
respectively
,
in contrast
with
engineering
, which reports a substantial
difference
between male employers
(
above 80%) and
female
workers (
marginally
less than 20%).
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IELTS academic The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculty of a major university in 2012.

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