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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. G1kB
The below bar graph reveals the information about people who were work in the diffrent academic faculties in the year 2012. The major impact have been showing on the engineering stream which had taken by males, and also on the enducation stream which had taken by females. However, women are almost four times less intrested in engineering, as well as men have nearly 3 times less apptitude in education. Other fields like science and business are liked by females approximately half than males. Moreover medicine stream have 50 percent attention by both females and males but females have been 2 more than males. In university, 18 percent males liked Law more than Arts and females liked 50 percent of Arts more than Law. Over all, academic faculties have been growning over the years. Both males and females are major going to Engineering or Education. In the entire graph we can see how females are decreases in the staff members than males. This would have to change.
The below bar graph reveals the information about
people
who were work in the
diffrent
academic faculties in the year 2012. The major impact have been showing on the engineering stream which had taken by
males
, and
also
on the
enducation
stream which had taken by females.

However
, women are almost four times less
intrested
in engineering,
as well
as
men
have
nearly
3 times less
apptitude
in education. Other fields like science and business
are liked
by
females
approximately half than
males
.
Moreover
medicine stream have 50 percent attention by both
females
and
males
but
females
have been 2 more than
males
. In university, 18 percent
males
liked Law more than Arts and
females
liked 50 percent of Arts more than Law.

Over all, academic faculties have been
growning
over the years. Both
males
and
females
are major going to Engineering or Education. In the entire graph we can
see
how
females
are decreases in the staff members than
males
. This would
have to
change
.
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IELTS academic The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.

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