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The graph shows the percentage of 4 different age groups in the total population of New Zealand from 1950 to 2050.

The graph shows the percentage of 4 different age groups in the total population of New Zealand from 1950 to 2050. eVEG
The graph shows the percentage of 4 different age groups in the total population of New Zealand from 1950 to 2050. Overall, while the percentage of people from 25 to 37 is predicted to be on the decrease, the opposite was seen in other groups. In addition, New Zealand has had an aged population with the dominance of people over 65. In 1950, the population of those older than 65 was accounted for 60% of the total population, and this number was by far higher than that of people from 25 to 37 and 38 to 45, at 20% and 25% respectively. In contrast, the percentage of people under 14 years old was the lowest at 5%. In the next 40 years, the percentage of people from the 2 oldest groups grew to reach a peak at 70% and 50% in 1990, then these numbers are predicted to see a decrease of around 10% to 2050. A significant increase of 15% is predicted to be seen in the percentage of those younger than 14 in 2050 while it is predicted that the percentage of the 25-to-37-year-old population has declined dramatically. In 2050 just above 0% of New Zealand people will be at the age of 25 to 37.
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from 25 to 37 is
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to be on the decrease, the opposite was
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seen
in other groups.
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, New Zealand has had an aged
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population
with the dominance of
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people
over 65.

In 1950, the
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of those older than 65
was accounted
for 60% of the total
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population
, and this number was by far higher than that of
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people
from 25 to 37 and 38 to 45, at 20% and 25%
respectively
.
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contrast, the
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people
under 14 years
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was the lowest at 5%.

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40 years, the
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of
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people
from the 2 oldest groups grew to reach a peak at 70% and 50% in 1990, then these numbers are
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predicted
to
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a decrease of around 10% to 2050. A significant increase of 15% is
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of those younger than 14 in 2050 while it is
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predicted
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of the 25-to-37-year-
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old
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population
has declined
dramatically
. In 2050
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just
above 0% of New Zealand
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will be at the age of 25 to 37.
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IELTS academic The graph shows the percentage of 4 different age groups in the total population of New Zealand from 1950 to 2050.

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