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The graph shows the numbers of visitors to four international museums between 1980 to 2015.

The graph shows the numbers of visitors to four international museums between 1980 to 2015. lymD
The given line graph depicts the information about how many people visited in four diverse kinds of international mamorials such as Louvre, London Science museum, Vatican and last one is Shenzhen museum from 1980 to 2015. It is clearly seen that, the proportion of individuals was in a millions. Firstly, the numbers of visitors to the London Science museum was start from just 4million in 1980. While, it decreased dramatically and reached around 2 million after thirty five years. By Contrast, visitors of Vatican library increased from just under 5 million in 1980 to merely 9million in the final year 2015. Furthermore, the numbers of Shenzhen museum stayed about same in the next 35 years. In the initial stage, it stated just over 3 million in 2000 after that it rose up again. Lastly, it reached at 4 million visitors in 2015. Finally, the public visit in Louvre gallery was nearly 8million in 1980 whereas after some fluctuations that observed approximately 9 million in 2015. Overall, Louvre was the most popular musuem, with between near about 8 to 9 million tourists visiting every year. However, the London Science museum and Shenzhen were the least preferred places.
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line graph depicts the information about how
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many
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visited in four diverse kinds of international
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mamorials
such as Louvre, London Science
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museum
, Vatican and last one is Shenzhen
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museum
from 1980 to 2015.

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that, the proportion of individuals was in a
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millions
.
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, the numbers of visitors to the London Science
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museum
was
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from
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4million
in 1980. While, it decreased
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and reached around 2
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million
after
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thirty five
years. By Contrast, visitors of Vatican library increased from
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under 5
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million
in 1980 to
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9million
in the final
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year
2015.

Furthermore
, the numbers of Shenzhen
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stayed about same in the
next
35 years. In the initial stage, it stated
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over 3
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million
in 2000 after that it rose up again.
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visitors in 2015.
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8million
in 1980 whereas after
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some
fluctuations that observed approximately 9
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million
in 2015.
Overall
, Louvre was the most popular
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musuem
, with between near about 8 to 9
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million
tourists visiting every
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.
However
, the London Science
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and Shenzhen were the least preferred places.
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