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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. kQyW

The line graph illustrates the amount of people visiting to Louvre, London science Museum, Vatican Museum and to Shenzhen Museum from 1980 to 2015. As the overview, Louvre Museum and Vatican Museum experienced an upward trend throughout the period while London Science Museum showed a downward trend and the Shenzhen Museum got fluctuations over the period. According to the graph, in 1980 to 1985 there was a slow rise of Louvre. After that the number of visitors had gone up gradually and again it showed a slight rise upto 9 million. The amount was went down significantly in 1995 to 2000, that was more than 8 million. As well as it depicted a moderate climb approximately same as the amount of Vatican. From another perspective, the museum got a noticeable increment all over the time period up to 2015. London Museum had a downward trend from 1990, that was slowly going through the time line, but prior of the time it gave a quick fall from 4million. In 1980 after 5 years the visiting to London museum remained constant, it figured 4 million. Considering the Shenzhen Museum accounted a fluctuations rather than other museums. It was beginning in almost 4 million and gradually dropping to year 2000. That was half from the starting point. Same figured trend had during 10 years London and Shenzhen. Ultimately, Shenzhen visitors went up slowly.

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