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The graph shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Startmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The graph shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Startmouth School from 2006 to the present. VmVw
The graph gives information about the number of library books scan by males and females at Starmouth School since 2006 to the present. Overall, the percentage of read females has been upward trend over the years. On the other hand, the boys have become fluctuation since started in 2009 until the present time. Firstly, the number of females reader were at 25 books in the first year and then increased gradually about 40 books from 2009 to 2010. Afterwards, there was a significant rise of 100 books over a year. In order, it also increased slightly about 140 books which has been read until the present time. Secondly, the percentage of boys read was about 50 books in 2009. After that, there was a slight growth from 50 to 80 books, and it continued a steadily increase of 100 books during a year. However, in 2011, the number of books reader have fallen dramatically at 80 books by boys and in addition it has been decreased nowadays.
The graph gives information about the number of library
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scan by males and females at
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Starmouth
School since 2006 to the present.
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, the percentage of read females has been upward trend over the years.
On the other hand
, the boys have become fluctuation since
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in 2009 until the present time.

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, the number of females reader were at 25
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and then increased
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about 40
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books
from 2009 to 2010. Afterwards, there was a significant rise of 100
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over a
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. In order, it
also
increased
slightly
about 140
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which has
been read
until the present time.

Secondly
, the percentage of boys read was about 50
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in 2009. After that, there was a slight growth from 50 to 80
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books
, and it continued a
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steadily increase
of 100
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during a
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.
However
, in 2011, the number of
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reader have fallen
dramatically
at 80
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by boys and
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it has
been decreased
nowadays.
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