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The graph shows the number of commuters using London Underground, the national rail network and the light rail and metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.

The graph shows the number of commuters using London Underground, the national rail network and the light rail and metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5. AM2X
The graph shows the number of commuters using London Underground, the national rail network and the light rail and metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5. Overall, the number of passenger journeys made on the three systems increased, but on London Underground it increased dramatically. The most striking figure was that one billion journeys were made a year on the national rail network in the 1950s. At that time, the London Underground was carrying around 750 million passengers and they fell to 500 million in 1980 compared to 600 million on the national rail network. From the beginning of the 1980s, the number of passenger journeys on all three main ways of transport rose rapidly. The number of passengers on London Underground and the national rail network were very similar throughout the remaining period, rising to approximately 1. 1 billion in 2004/5. The period ended with the national railway slightly higher than the starting point and London Underground in second place with just under 1 billion passengers and light and metro at third place with approximately 200 million passenger journeys.
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of commuters using London
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, the
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national
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rail
network and the light
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rail
and metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.

Overall
, the
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number
of
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passenger
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journeys
made on the three systems increased,
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on London
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Underground
it increased
dramatically
. The most striking figure was that one billion
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journeys
were made
a year on the
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national
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rail
network in the 1950s. At that time, the London
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was carrying around 750
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million
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passengers and
they fell to 500
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million
in 1980 compared to 600
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million
on the
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national
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rail
network.

From the beginning of the 1980s, the
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number
of
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passenger
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journeys
on all three main ways of transport rose
rapidly
. The
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of
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passengers
on London
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and the
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national
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rail
network were
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similar throughout the remaining period, rising to approximately 1. 1 billion in 2004/5.

The period ended with the
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national
railway
slightly
higher than the starting point and London
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Underground
in second place with
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under 1 billion
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passengers
and light and metro at third place with approximately 200
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IELTS academic The graph shows the number of commuters using London Underground, the national rail network and the light rail and metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.

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