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The graph shows the figures for CFC emissions in four countries between 1989 and 2001. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.

The graph shows the figures for CFC emissions in four countries between 1989 and 2001. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below. k51QN
At glance at the graph provided reveals the number of CFC emissions which are released into the atmosphere in the period from 1989 and 2001 in Egypt, Poland, Ukraine and Malaysia. We can see from the graph that Poland and Ukraine had a biggest quantity of emission with 5000 metric tons and about 4600 metric tons in 1989. However, in the next years, these figures dropped sharply. While in Poland, the amount of emission dropped steadily to a low point of approximately 100 metric tons in 2001; in Ukraine, there was a sharp decline in emitting gases, reaching a point of less than 1000 metric tons and then went up slightly until 2001 with about 1100 metric tons. Meanwhile, Malaysia and Egypt had a lower emission than Poland and Ukraine in 1989; and then these figures were higher than other countries in 2001. Malaysia, for example, there was about 3300 metric tons in 1989 and this remained constant until 1995 before it started to fall gradually. At the same period time, there was a steady decrease in emission between 1989 and 2001 in Egypt. A final point to note is that although Malaysia hold in a third position of emission in 1989, this country took a lead when releasing 2000 metric tons into the atmosphere.
At glance at the graph provided reveals the number of CFC
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emissions
which
are released
into the atmosphere in the period
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from 1989 and 2001
in Egypt, Poland, Ukraine and Malaysia.

We can
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see
from the graph that Poland and Ukraine had
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a
biggest quantity of
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emission
with 5000 metric tons and about 4600 metric tons in 1989.
However
, in the
next
years, these figures dropped
sharply
. While in Poland, the amount of
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emission
dropped
steadily
to a low point of approximately 100 metric tons in 2001; in Ukraine, there was a sharp decline in emitting gases, reaching a point of less than 1000 metric tons and then went up
slightly
until 2001 with about 1100 metric tons.

Meanwhile, Malaysia and Egypt had a lower
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emission
than Poland and Ukraine in 1989; and then these figures were higher than other countries in 2001. Malaysia,
for example
, there was about 3300 metric tons in 1989 and this remained constant until 1995
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before
it
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started
to fall
gradually
. At the same period time, there was a steady decrease in
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emission
between 1989 and 2001 in Egypt.

A final point to note is that although Malaysia hold in a third position of
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emission
in 1989, this country took a lead when releasing 2000 metric tons into the atmosphere.
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