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The graph shows the expenditure on person and education

The graph shows the expenditure on person and education p1jr9
The line graph depicts the information about the expenditure of nation on medical care teaching and pension between 2001 2003 the data has been calibrated in percentages. After analysing, it can be seen clearly that is spending on pension showed an overall rising trend, it comprised to just under a fifth from 2001 to 2006. However the percentage of expenditure on medical care decreased rapidly between 2003 and 2006. Wheras expenditure on pension and medical care were constant at 6% and 11% respectively from 2003 to 2006. The line graph further collates that investment on education was stable at 13% between 2002 and 2007, while in 2001 spending on education was highest that was almost 15%. Overall, it is lucid that expenditure on pension followed upward trend, downward trend was followed by medical care.
The line graph depicts the information about the
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teaching and
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pension
between 2001 2003 the data has
been calibrated
in percentages.

After
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, it can be
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pension
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under a fifth from 2001 to 2006.
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However
the percentage of
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expenditure
on
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medical
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care
decreased
rapidly
between 2003 and 2006.
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Wheras
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expenditure
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and
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medical
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were constant at 6% and 11%
respectively
from 2003 to 2006.

The line graph
further
collates that investment on education was stable at 13% between 2002 and 2007, while in 2001 spending on education was highest that was almost 15%.

Overall
, it is lucid that
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expenditure
on
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pension
followed upward trend, downward trend
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by
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medical
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care
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