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The graph shows the changes in wage levels of full-time US male workers by education for 1964-2012

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The line graph compares the proportion of salary levels of U. S male who worked full-time in education between 1964 and 2012. Overall, it can be seen clearly that the wage levels of male workers gaining higher Bachelor’s degrees tended to dominate in this working field. The proportion of wage from Bachelor’ degree had the lead in the way throughout the whole period, in 2012 account for nearly 2% of the total wage. Similarly, Bachelor’s degree and some college increased sharply, with 1. 4% and 1. 2% respectively. In contrast, there was a different trend from High school graduates as well as Less than High School in salary levels. At the end of the period, Less than high school graduates just account for more than 1% of the percent of the total and approximately only a very small percentage from Less than High School. Remarkably, all the wage levels started at 1% in the beginning year – 1964. In conclusion, it can see that
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of U. S male who worked full-time in education between 1964 and 2012.
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of male workers gaining higher Bachelor’s degrees tended to dominate in this working field.

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IELTS academic The graph shows the changes in wage levels of full-time US male workers by education for 1964-2012

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