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The graph shows the changes in the demand for hamburgers, fish & chips and pizza from 1970 to 1990

The graph shows the changes in the demand for hamburgers, fish & chips and pizza from 1970 to 1990 Kl8w6
The graph shows the changes in the demand for hamburgers, fish & chips and pizza from 1970 to 1990. It is immediately apparent that in 1970 the most popular food was pizza. The demand for pizza started from 300 grams followed by a spectacular fall of 200 grams in 1985. The striking feature of the graph is the demand for fish & chips. In 1970, fish & chips were the second favourite food among people, and from 1980 on the total demand surged to a high of 500 grams from 99 in 1970. Furthermore, hamburgers were the least popular food in 1970 with the total demand of 15 grams, which increased gradually till 1985. The total demand for hamburgers skyrocketed to 299 grams in 1990. In conclusion, there was a subsential increase in the demand for hamburgers and sea food, whereas there was a significant fall in the popularity of pizza.
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for hamburgers, fish & chips and pizza from 1970 to 1990.

It is immediately apparent that in 1970 the most popular
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food
was pizza. The
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demand
for pizza
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started
from 300
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grams
followed by a spectacular fall of 200
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grams
in 1985.

The striking feature of the graph is the
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demand
for fish & chips. In 1970, fish & chips were the second
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food
among
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people
, and from 1980 on the total
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demand
surged to a high of 500
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grams
from 99 in 1970.

Furthermore
, hamburgers were the least popular
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food
in 1970 with the total
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demand
of 15
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grams
, which increased
gradually
till 1985. The total
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for hamburgers skyrocketed to 299
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grams
in 1990.

In conclusion
, there was a
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subsential
increase in the
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demand
for hamburgers and sea
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food
, whereas there was a significant fall in the popularity of pizza.

IELTS academic The graph shows the changes in the demand for hamburgers, fish & chips and pizza from 1970 to 1990

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