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The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. P1KB
The bar chart indicates the spend of money from 1995 and 2000 in various leisure activity. From an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the United States has the highest amount of money to spend while Asia is the opposite. Publishing is the most favourite entertainment and continually increase over the years. On the second place, television with slightly less enthusiats also increasing. Cinema, on the other hand, has always been the least activity to chose. Comparing the chart from 1995 and 2000, it is clear that people are more and more attracted to entertainment. There are huge increase in all three regions. The graph is dramatically increase in almost all kind of amusement. This indicates the high rate of spending in Asia, Europe and United States.
The bar chart indicates the spend of money
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 1995 to 2000"?
from 1995 and 2000
in various leisure activity. From an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that the United States has the highest amount of money to spend while Asia is the opposite.

Publishing is the most
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favourite
entertainment and
continually
increase over the years. On the second place, television with
slightly
less
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enthusiats
also
increasing. Cinema,
on the other hand
, has always been the least activity
Did you mean "to choose"?
to chose
.

Comparing the chart
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from 1995 and 2000
, it is
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clear
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are more and more attracted to entertainment. There are huge increase in all three regions. The graph is
dramatically
Consider using a past participle here: "increased".
increase
in almost all kind of amusement. This indicates the high rate of spending in Asia, Europe and United States.

IELTS academic The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period.

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