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The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given graph describes a data that reflect percentage of a British people that donating money to charity. It compares gathered information separately between 1990 and 2010 years. In most cases, percent of donations has been decreased but there is also cases of increasing. For example, age range of 18-25 have a significant decrease of people that giving money to charity. In 1990 it was about 17% of people but in 2010 it dropped to 7%. This age range got the most loss of all other categories. Overwhelming 10% decrease! Age between 26-35 got a percentage decreased equals to 7%, from 31% in 1990 to 24% in 2010. People that are 36-50 years old also lost people that interested in charity. In 1990 it was about 42% people but it dropped by 7% to 35% in2010. There is also a tendency that older people are more often engaged in charity then young people. Category of 51 to 65 years old got increase of people that involved to charity. It increased to 39% at 2010 from 35% at 1990. Also people that are older than 65 years old get more interested in charity. Percentage of people increased from 32% to 35%. To sum up, the number of people that are involved in charity in Britain is decreased by 17% and all of this 17% of people are concentrated in age range of 18-50 years old.
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graph
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describes
a data that reflect percentage of a British
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people
that donating money to
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charity
. It compares gathered information
separately
between 1990 and 2010 years.

In most cases
, percent of donations has
been decreased
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but
there is
also
cases of increasing.
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,
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age
range of 18-25 have a significant decrease of
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people
that giving money to
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charity
. In
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1990 it
was about 17% of
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people
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but
in 2010 it dropped to 7%. This
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age
range
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got
the most loss of all other categories. Overwhelming 10% decrease!
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Age
between 26-35
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got
a percentage decreased equals to 7%, from 31% in 1990 to 24% in 2010.
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People
that are 36-50 years
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old
also
lost
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people
that interested in
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charity
. In
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1990 it
was about 42%
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people
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but
it dropped by 7% to 35% in2010.

There is
also
a tendency that older
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people
are more
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often
engaged in
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charity
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then
young
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people
. Category of 51 to 65 years
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old
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got
increase of
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people
that involved to
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charity
. It increased to 39% at 2010 from 35% at 1990.
Also
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people
that are older than 65 years
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old
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get
more interested in
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charity
. Percentage of
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people
increased from 32% to 35%.

To sum up, the number of
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people
that
are involved
in
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charity
in Britain
is decreased
by 17% and all of this 17% of
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people
are concentrated
in
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age
range of 18-50 years
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old
.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches.

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