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The graph shows how many people were employed in the Australian mining industry from 1900 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This line graph illustrates the number of employees in thousands in the mining industry in Australia between 1900 and 1990. At the beginning of the century more than 60, 000 people were employed in this sector, but by the end of the first decade this fell to only 40, 000. The number of employees continued to decline throughout the 1920’s and 1930’s, but at a much lower rate than previously, reaching a low of 30, 000 in 1940. This was followed by a dramatic growth to 50, 000 in the next 10 years. However, from 1950 onwards the decline began again and was marked by a sharp drop at the beginning of the 1960’s after which the rate of decline slowed. By 1990, only 15, 000 people were working in this sector. Overall, it is clear that employment in the Australian mining industry declined significantly throughout this century, although there was a peak in the number of employees in 1950.
This line graph illustrates the number of employees in thousands in the mining industry in Australia between 1900 and 1990.

At the beginning of the century more than 60, 000
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40, 000. The number of employees continued to decline throughout the
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1930’s
,
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at a much lower rate than previously, reaching a low of 30, 000 in 1940. This
was followed
by a dramatic growth to 50, 000 in the
next
10 years.
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, from 1950 onwards the decline began again and
was marked
by a sharp drop at the beginning of the
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1960’s
after which the rate of decline slowed. By 1990,
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15, 000
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people
were working in this sector.

Overall
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that employment in the Australian mining industry declined
significantly
throughout this century, although there was a peak in the number of employees in 1950.
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