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The graph shows birth and death rates from 1901 to 2101. Summarize the information and contrast between it.

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The given graph illustrates the birth and death changes in new zealand over a period of 100 years. The units are expressed with respect to thousands. Overall, it represents a spike increase in birth as well as death percentages in 2101 with contrast to 1901. However, the birth rate demonstrates a fluctuation by soaring in midway then, sinking back during the ending years. In contrast, death rates leapt upwards gradually and remained constant for 40 years. With reference to the number of birth rates, in the initial years it was 20, 000 and it further climbed to approximately 63, 000 in 1961, nevertheless declined to 42, 000 in 2101. As far as death toll is concerned, it was lower than births at 9, 000 in 1901 until 2041 when deaths rocketed tremendously rather than births for a period of 60 years. In addition, it depicts the sedentary lifestyle becoming a source for health deterioration consequently resulting in lower birth numbers from 2041 to 2101.
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over a period of 100 years. The units
are expressed
with respect to thousands.
Overall
, it represents a spike increase in
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birth
as well
as death percentages in 2101 with contrast to 1901.
However
, the
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birth
rate demonstrates a fluctuation by soaring in midway then, sinking back during the ending years.
In contrast
, death rates leapt upwards
gradually
and remained constant for 40 years. With reference to the number of
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birth
rates, in the initial years it was 20, 000 and it
further
climbed to approximately 63, 000 in 1961,
nevertheless
declined to 42, 000 in 2101. As far as death toll
is concerned
, it was lower than
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births
at 9, 000 in 1901 until 2041 when deaths rocketed
tremendously
rather
than
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births
for a period of 60 years.
In addition
, it depicts the sedentary lifestyle becoming a source for health deterioration
consequently
resulting in lower
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birth
numbers from 2041 to 2101.

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