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The chart illustrates how many youngsters in 4 countries enrolled in university between 2000 and 2010.

The chart illustrates how many youngsters in 4 countries enrolled in university between 2000 and 2010. 6mDx8
The chart illustrates how many youngsters in 4 countries enrolled in university between 2000 and 2010. Overall, there was an increase in the proportion of young people studying in higher education in all 4 countries examined, with country D witnessing the most dramatic rise. Meanwhile, country B generally had the lowest figures throughout the period. The percentage of young people’s university participation in country D started at about 45%, after which it saw a growth to exactly 60% in 2010. By contrast, the figure for Country B decreased slightly from 40% to merely 38% and rose again to 40%. Approximately 36% of teenagers who were following higher education in country A, with a subsequence jump to reach a peak at around 59% in the final year. In addition, the figure for country C rose from about 42 % to 47% in 2005 and maintained at this level towards the end of the period.
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enrolled in university between 2000 and 2010.

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studying in higher education in all 4
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D witnessing the most dramatic rise. Meanwhile,
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D
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B decreased
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A, with a subsequence jump to reach a peak at around 59% in the final year.
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C rose from about 42 % to 47% in 2005 and maintained at this level towards the
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IELTS academic The chart illustrates how many youngsters in 4 countries enrolled in university between 2000 and 2010.

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