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The graph illustrates the proportion of women and men graduating

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The graph illustrates the proportion of women and men graduating from universities in Canada for 15 year time period from 1992 to 2007. Overall, the total number of graduates almost revealed a positive trend in the given time period. Moreover, it can be clearly seen that the number of female student graduates are more compared to men. The count of female graduates started at slightly less than 100, 000 in 1992. This amount then rose near to 150 thousand in 2007. However, Male graduates contributed to 70 thousand in chart at 1992 reaching to almost 95, 000 in 2007. In terms of men and women graduates, the rate of change remained same until 2000. From this point, the graph for men inclined constantly with the pupil count reaching to 150, 000 which is 55, 000 more than female graduates total in 2007. While the difference between female graduates in 2007 and 1992 is 25000, it is half to the difference in male graduates in the same period.
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graduating from universities in Canada for
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15 year
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almost revealed a
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trend in the
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clearly
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that the number of
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female
student
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are more compared to
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men
.

The count of
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female
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graduates
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started
at
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less than 100, 000 in 1992. This amount then rose near to 150 thousand in 2007.
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contributed to 70 thousand in chart at 1992 reaching to almost 95, 000 in 2007.

In terms of
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men
and women
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, the rate of
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change
remained same until 2000. From this point, the graph for
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men
inclined
constantly
with the pupil count reaching to 150, 000 which is 55, 000 more than
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female
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graduates
total in 2007. While the difference between
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female
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in 2007 and 1992 is 25000, it is half to the difference in male
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graduates
in the same period.
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