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The graph illustrates the life expectancy of people born in six various regions of Asia,

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The graph illustrates the life expectancy of people born in six various regions of Asia, starting from 2050 until 2030. Overall, since 1950 all life expectancy in six regions has increased. According to the data, Eastern Asia has the highest increase in life expectancy compared to other Asia regions. It started with almost 60 years in 1950 and it is projected that the average life expectancy in Eastern Asia would be approximately 100 years by 2300. Since 1950 until 2000 the life expectancy in China has been growing rapidly, from 40 years to 70 years and it is predicted that the average life expectancy would grow up to almost 100 years. Wester China, India, South-eastern Asia and other south central regions of Asia had almost the same life expectancy in 1950, at 40 years. In 2000 wester Asia and south-eastern Asia more higher life expectancy compared to India and other South-central regions of Asia. It is projected that all this four regions would level off at the same rate, at almost 100 years. In conclusion, the life expectancy in six various regions of Asia has increased significantly and it is expected that they would rise to 100 years.
The graph illustrates the
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expectancy of
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born in six various
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of Asia, starting from 2050 until 2030.
Overall
, since 1950 all
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expectancy in six
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regions
has increased.

According to the data, Eastern Asia has the highest increase in
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expectancy compared to other Asia
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. It
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almost
60 years in 1950 and it
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life
expectancy in Eastern Asia would be approximately 100 years by 2300. Since 1950 until 2000 the
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life
expectancy in China has been growing
rapidly
, from 40 years to 70 years and it
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that the average
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life
expectancy would grow up to
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almost
100 years.

Wester China, India, South-eastern Asia and other south central
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regions
of Asia had
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almost
the same
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life
expectancy in 1950, at 40 years. In 2000 wester Asia and south-eastern Asia
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life
expectancy compared to India and other South-central
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regions
of Asia. It
is projected
that all this four
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regions
would level off at the same rate, at
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almost
100 years.

In conclusion
, the
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expectancy in six various
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of Asia has increased
significantly
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that they would rise to 100 years.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the life expectancy of people born in six various regions of Asia,

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