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The graph illustrates the details about alterations in the fertility rate and mortality rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101

The graph illustrates the details about alterations in the fertility rate and mortality rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101 a71pd
The graph illustrates the details about alterations in the fertility rate and mortality rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. Overall, the birth rate shows rapid changes before falling steadily while death rates depict to rise gradually. However, the rate of mortality is lower than the rate of fertility over the period given. In 1901, the birth rates start at 20000 people and rose significantly around 30000 before an upward trend between 1921 and 1941. Then, the figure rises dramatically to a peak of the graph at around 65000 in 1961. Throughout the period from 1961 to 1981, the statistic began to decline considerably exact 60000 and increase again before dropping suddenly to 50000. By 1981, the rate of fertility climbed sharply to 60000 and decreased to 50000 back in 2001 previously continues to go down moderately in next 100 years. Below 10000 death are recorded in 1901 and increase gradually under 30000 peoples over the period between 1901 and 2001. During the next 60 years, the death rates show rapid growth to nearby 60000 individuals and remain steady before plunging slightly to around 55000 in 2101.
The graph illustrates the
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about alterations in the fertility
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rate
and mortality
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rates
in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
, the birth
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shows
rapid
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before
falling
steadily
while death
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rates
depict to rise
gradually
.
However
, the
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rate
of mortality is lower than the
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rate
of fertility over the period
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given
.

In 1901, the birth
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start
at 20000
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people
and rose
significantly
around 30000
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before
an upward trend between 1921 and 1941. Then, the figure rises
dramatically
to a peak of the graph at around 65000 in 1961. Throughout the period from 1961 to 1981, the statistic began to decline
considerably
exact 60000 and increase again
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before
dropping
suddenly
to 50000. By 1981, the
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rate
of fertility climbed
sharply
to 60000 and decreased to 50000 back in 2001 previously continues to go down
moderately
in
next
100 years.

Below 10000 death
are recorded
in 1901 and increase
gradually
under 30000 peoples over the period between 1901 and 2001. During the
next
60 years, the death
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rates
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show
rapid growth to nearby 60000 individuals and remain steady
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before
plunging
slightly
to around 55000 in 2101.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the details about alterations in the fertility rate and mortality rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101

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