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Task1, ten countries for production and consumption

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The diagram illustrates the countries that produce and consume most of the electricity during 2014 The China is a biggest nation for electricity in terms of both production and consumption as they have produced 5, 398kWh of electricity and consumed 5, 322kWh, and United Stated is followed the next as they have produced 4, 099kWh and consumed 3, 866kWh. Total electricity use of these two countries is higher than usage sum of other countries in nominated together. Republic of Korea is ranked 10th, producing 485kWh and consuming 449. 5kWh. It is more than 10times the difference from 1st, which is the China and 2time more than 3rd, which is the Russia and had produced electricity 1, 057kWh and consumed 1, 0338kWh. After third country, production and consumption of all the countries are less than 1, 000kWh. The consumption of Germany in 9th is 582. 5kWh and it is over than the production, which is 582. 5kWh, and it is also higher than 6th country, which is the Canada consumed 499. 9kHw. and it is only one where the consumption is higher than the production.
The diagram illustrates the
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countries
that produce and consume most of the
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electricity
during 2014

The China is
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a
biggest nation for
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electricity
in terms of both
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production
and
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consumption
as they have produced 5,
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398kWh
of
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electricity
and
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consumed
5,
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322kWh
, and United Stated
is followed
the
next
as they have produced 4,
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099kWh
and
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consumed
3,
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866kWh
. Total
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electricity
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use
of these two
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countries
is higher than usage sum of other
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countries
in nominated together.

Republic of Korea
is ranked
10th, producing
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485kWh
and consuming 449.
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5kWh
. It is more than 10times the difference from 1st, which is the China and 2time more than 3rd, which is the Russia and had produced
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electricity
1,
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057kWh
and
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consumed
1,
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0338kWh
. After third
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country
,
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production
and
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consumption
of all the
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countries
are less than 1,
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000kWh
.

The
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consumption
of Germany in 9th is 582.
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5kWh
and it is
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over
than the
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production
, which is 582.
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5kWh
, and it is
also
higher than 6th
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country
, which is the Canada
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consumed
499. 9kHw.
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and
it is
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is higher than the
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.
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IELTS academic Task1, ten countries for production and consumption

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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