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The graph illustrates minutes of time spent by both sexes on the daily six household chores in Great Britain.

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The above graph illustrates minutes of time spent by both sexes on the daily six household chores in Great Britain. In general, males are more interested in doing gardening and pet care whereas females prefer cooking most compared to all. In detail, men seem to avoid doing ironing and washing, coming to women its maintenance of odd jobs. In a deeper sense, the female spends 44 minutes more time cooking compared to men. And men doing double of women work in gardening, whereas female spends 3x the time of men in cleaning house. Care of children is dominated by women with 25 minutes more. coming to maintenance jobs females are working only one-third of men time. While in ironing, clothes, washing men only 2 minutes and women spend 25 minutes of her day.
The above graph illustrates minutes of
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spent by both sexes on the daily six household chores in Great Britain.

In general
, males are more interested in
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doing gardening
and pet care whereas
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females
prefer cooking most compared to all. In detail,
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men
seem to avoid
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doing ironing
and washing, coming to
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women
its maintenance of odd jobs.

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In
a deeper sense, the
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female
spends 44 minutes more
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time
cooking compared to
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men
. And
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men
doing double of
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women
work in gardening, whereas
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female
spends 3x the
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time
of
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men
in cleaning
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house
.

Care of children
is dominated
by
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women
with 25 minutes more.
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coming
to maintenance jobs
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females
are working
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only
one-third of
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men
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time
. While in ironing, clothes, washing
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men
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only
2 minutes and
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women
spend 25 minutes of her day.

IELTS academic The graph illustrates minutes of time spent by both sexes on the daily six household chores in Great Britain.

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