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The graph gives information on the popularity of three subjects at a regional university between 1960 and 2020.

The graph gives information on the popularity of three subjects at a regional university between 1960 and 2020. N8drq
The Line graph illustrates the data on the proportion of students enrolled in three different courses( Humanities, Science, and Medicine ) at a local university from 1960 to 2020. Overall, the number of pupils enrolled in humanities has drastically decreased whereas, students enroll in medicine has increased over the period. Students choosing science course has remained same for 60 years. The humanities course has shown very different trends among other subjects. The popularity of it was at the peak in 1960 at 45% which, has remained stable for around a decade. After, that a significant fall in numbers has been seen to 7% in 2020. Medicine was the least popular in 1960 at only 20% of enrolls. This figure has boosted moderately till 2000 ( around 35%) but, fell to 30% in 2020. The enrollments in the science field have remained stable over the period. Starting at 30% in 1960, which has slightly fallen to around 25% over the next 40 years but, has returned to the same level in 2020.
The Line graph illustrates the data on the proportion of students enrolled in three
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courses
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Humanities, Science, and Medicine
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at a local university from 1960 to 2020.

Overall
, the number of pupils enrolled in humanities has
drastically
decreased whereas, students enroll in medicine has increased over the period. Students choosing science course has remained same for 60 years.

The humanities course has shown
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very
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different
trends among other subjects. The popularity of it was at the peak in 1960 at 45% which, has remained stable for around a decade.
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After
, that a significant fall in numbers has been
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seen
to 7% in 2020.

Medicine was the least popular in 1960 at
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only
20% of enrolls. This figure has boosted
moderately
till 2000
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(
around 35%)
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but
, fell to 30% in 2020. The enrollments in the science field have remained stable over the period. Starting at 30% in 1960, which has
slightly
fallen to around 25% over the
next
40 years
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, has returned to the same level in 2020.
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