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The graph gives information about the every year earnings of three bakeries in London between 2000-2010.

The graph gives information about the every year earnings of three bakeries in London between 2000-2010. jR0Ma
The graph gives information about the every year earnings of three bakeries in London between 2000-2010. It is clear from the graph that the amount of earned money in Bernies's Buns and Robbie's Bakery saw a gradual growth over the given period. However, there was a significant decrease in the income of Lovely Loaves, which was leading the graph at the beginning of the period. In 2000, the amount of earned money in Bernie's Buns was 20000$. In 2007, this index doubled, and by the end of the period, it rose to almost 60000$ with reaching its high peak. Moreover, there was a significant growth after long stability in the income of Robbie's Bakery reaching to 100000$ in 2010, which was about just 60000$ at the beginning of the period. In 2000, the amount of earned money in Lovely Loaves was sharply 80000$. In 2001, the income had risen to nearly 100000$, but it fell back to just 40000$ in 2010
The graph gives information about the every year earnings of three bakeries in London between 2000-2010.

It is
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from the graph that the amount of earned money in
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Bernies
's Buns and Robbie's Bakery
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saw
a gradual growth over the
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given
period.
However
, there was a significant decrease in the income of Lovely Loaves, which was leading the graph at the beginning of the period.

In 2000, the amount of earned money in Bernie's Buns was
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$20000".
20000$
. In 2007, this index doubled, and by the
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end
of the period, it rose to almost
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$60000".
60000$
with reaching its high peak.
Moreover
, there was a significant growth after long stability in the income of Robbie's Bakery reaching to
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$100000".
100000$
in 2010, which was about
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just
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$60000".
60000$
at the beginning of the period.

In 2000, the amount of earned money in Lovely Loaves was
sharply
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$80000".
80000$
. In 2001, the income had risen to
nearly
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$100000".
100000$
,
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but
it fell back to
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just
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$40000".
40000$
in 2010
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