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The graph gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101

THE LINE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE RATES OF BIRTH AND DEATH RECORDED IN NEW ZELAND FROM 1901 TO 2021, AND FORECASTS TRENDS TIP UNTIL 2101. IT CAN BE SEEN THAT BETWEEN 1901 AND 1964 THE BIRTH RATE DRASTICALLY ROSE FROM 20000 TO ALMOST 70000. FROM 1964 TO 2001 IT FLUCTUATED FROM 50000 TO 70000. AFTER 2001 UNTILL 2021 THE AMOUNT OF BIRTHS HAS CONTINUED TO DECREASE, REACHING NOWDAY THE PEAK OF 50000. ACCORDING TO THE GRAPH THE BIRTH RATE WILL CONTINUE TO SLOWLY DROP TO 40000 OVER THE NEXT EIGHTY YEARS. IN CONTRAST, THE DEATH RATE HAS CONSTANTLY INCREASED (FROM LESS THAN 10000 IN 1901 TO 35000 in 2021) AND IT IS PREDICTED TO GO UP TO 60000 in 2061, WITH JUST SLIGHT OSCILLATIONS UNTIL THE END OF THE CENTURY. OVERALL, SINCE 1901 TO PRESENT DAY, THE BIRTH RATE HAS REMAINED CONSISTENTLY HIGHER THAN THE DEATH RATE. BUT, ACCORDING TO THE GRAPH, IT EXPECTED TO CHANGE IN 2041, WHEN THE MORTALITY RATE WILL OVERTAKE THE BIRTH RATE.
THE LINE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE
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RATES
OF
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BIRTH
AND DEATH RECORDED IN NEW
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ZELAND
FROM 1901 TO 2021, AND FORECASTS TRENDS TIP UNTIL 2101.

IT CAN BE
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SEEN
THAT BETWEEN 1901 AND 1964 THE
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BIRTH
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RATE
DRASTICALLY
ROSE FROM 20000 TO ALMOST 70000. FROM 1964 TO 2001 IT FLUCTUATED FROM 50000 TO 70000. AFTER 2001
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UNTILL
2021 THE AMOUNT OF
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BIRTHS
HAS CONTINUED TO DECREASE, REACHING
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NOWDAY
THE PEAK OF 50000. ACCORDING TO THE GRAPH THE
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BIRTH
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RATE
WILL CONTINUE TO
SLOWLY
DROP TO 40000 OVER THE
NEXT
EIGHTY YEARS.

IN CONTRAST
, THE DEATH
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RATE
HAS
CONSTANTLY
INCREASED (FROM LESS THAN 10000 IN 1901 TO 35000 in 2021) AND IT
IS PREDICTED
TO GO UP TO 60000 in 2061, WITH
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JUST
SLIGHT OSCILLATIONS UNTIL THE
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END
OF THE CENTURY.

OVERALL
, SINCE 1901 TO PRESENT DAY, THE
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BIRTH
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RATE
HAS REMAINED
CONSISTENTLY
HIGHER THAN THE DEATH
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RATE
.
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, ACCORDING TO THE GRAPH, IT
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EXPECTED
TO
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CHANGE
IN 2041, WHEN THE MORTALITY
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WILL OVERTAKE THE
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