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The graph give information about female and male between 1980 to 2010.

The graph give information about female and male between 1980 to 2010. PrG8X

The line graph illustrates the gym member's information which is taken by men and women between 1980 to 2010 time period. Overall, we can see that 1980 to 1987 men took gym membership higher than women while in near about 1990 to 1999 seductively less ratio of men's members. Although, during this period women contributed more in gym. In the beginning, approximately 2000 male members were participated in 1980 while, only 1000 female were there. Secondly, gents ratio was climbed up upto near about 4000 in 1985; whereas, ladies members were slowly increased till roughly 1800 in 1985. However, gentlemen proportion was decreased up to 1800 in 1986 to 1999 while, ladies participated person ratio was high 2500 in 1995 after, there were looked minor fluctuations with entire years.

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between 1980 to 2010
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during this period women contributed more in gym.

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approximately 2000 male members were participated
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 1000 female were there. Secondly
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gentlemen proportion was decreased
 up to 1800 in 1986 to 1999 while, ladies participated person ratio was high 2500 in 1995 after, there were looked
 minor fluctuations with entire years. 