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The Graph demonstrates the amount of parcels delivered in a country from 1920 to 2000

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The line graph provided compares the number of parcels delivered by FedEx and TNT companies between 1920 and 2000. Overall, the amount of parcels delivered by TNT firm was much more than the ones by Fedex during the given period. In 1920, the rate of parcels served by FedEx stood at 15000. After two decades of time it rose dramatically and peaked at just under 25000. Ten year later, the proportion hit the lowest point and remained unchanged by 1960. During next years the number of deliveries increased steadily and levelled off by 2020( namely 18000)Initially, the figures for TNT company stood at 5000 with the lowest proportion. During the next 4 decades the amount of parcels fluctuated comparing to FedEx services. In 1960 the ranks rose slightly just over 10000. It plateaued till 1990 witnesses sharp rise and the figures rose just under 25000 in 2000.
The line graph provided compares the number of
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parcels
delivered by FedEx and TNT
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companies
between 1920 and 2000.
Overall
, the amount of
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parcels
delivered by TNT firm was much more than the ones by
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Fedex
during the
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given
period. In 1920, the rate of
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parcels
served by FedEx stood at 15000. After two decades of time it rose
dramatically
and peaked at
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just
under 25000. Ten year later, the proportion hit the lowest point and remained unchanged by 1960. During
next
years the number of deliveries increased
steadily
and levelled off by 2020
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namely
18000)
Initially
, the figures for TNT
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company
stood at 5000 with the lowest proportion. During the
next
4 decades the amount of
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parcels
fluctuated comparing to FedEx services. In 1960 the ranks rose
slightly
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just
over 10000. It plateaued till 1990 witnesses sharp rise and the figures rose
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just
under 25000 in 2000.
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IELTS academic The Graph demonstrates the amount of parcels delivered in a country from 1920 to 2000

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