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The graph compares five countries, namely A, B, C, D, E, in terms of movie industry over a two-year period during 2007 to 2009

The graph compares five countries, namely A, B, C, D, E, in terms of movie industry over a two-year period during 2007 to 2009 OwoWN
The graph compares five countries, namely A, B, C, D, E, in terms of movie industry over a two-year period during 2007 to 2009. Overall, A was the dominant in producing movies throughout the period, whereas E was the least. It can be seen from the bar chart that there had been an upward trend in B, C and E. Especially, B stood out of the group in manufacturing films. With 50% in 2007, this country showed a rapid increase, at 70% in 2009. Meanwhile, C and E, which experienced the similar trend, just went up slightly, approximately 5% in three examined years. Regarding A, in 2007 and 2008, it is clear that this country had no changes in movie production, nearly 88%, and always kept the highest position compared with others. However, a year later, the figure declined slowly, down to 80%. In regards to movie manufacturers, D witnessed considerable fluctuation, beginning at 14% in 2007, it plummeted to 9% in 2008 and rose 3% more at the end of the period.
The graph compares five countries,
namely
A, B, C, D, E, in terms of
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movie
industry over a two-year period during 2007 to 2009.
Overall
, A was the dominant in producing
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movies
throughout the period, whereas E was the least.

It can be
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from the bar chart that there had been an upward trend in B, C and E.
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, B stood out of the group in manufacturing films. With 50% in 2007, this country
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showed
a rapid increase, at 70% in 2009. Meanwhile, C and E, which experienced the similar trend,
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, approximately 5% in three examined years.

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that this country had no
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production,
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the highest position compared with others.
However
, a year later, the figure declined
slowly
, down to 80%.
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manufacturers, D witnessed considerable fluctuation, beginning at 14% in 2007, it plummeted to 9% in 2008 and rose 3% more at the
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IELTS academic The graph compares five countries, namely A, B, C, D, E, in terms of movie industry over a two-year period during 2007 to 2009

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