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The graph below shows the sale of tea and coffee in Jules Beverage Stall at various times during the during day Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the sale of tea and coffee in Jules Beverage Stall at various times during the during day q029G
The given line graph depicts the total count of beverages like tea and coffee sold out from Jules Beverage stall at different times on a day. Overall, it is observed that the sale of coffee was far ahead of tea. The trade of coffee was close to 100 at 9: 00 am. Thereafter it plummetted to 25 at 10: 00 am. After that, the graph gradually rose and by 4: 00 pm the deal reached 100. However, the graph showed a significant drop again after 4: 00 pm and marked below 25. Till 9: 00 pm the diagram was fluctuating but stayed just below 25. On the other hand, the vending of coffee started at 9: 00 am with a count of 25. From 10: 00 am onwards the sale slowly increased and between 2 and 3 pm it was nearly 100. But after 3 pm the sale decreased and reached below 25.
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line graph depicts the total count of beverages like tea and
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coffee
sold out from Jules Beverage stall at
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different
times on a day.
Overall
, it
is observed
that the sale of
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coffee
was far ahead of tea.

The trade of
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coffee
was close to 100 at 9: 00 am.
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Thereafter
it
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plummetted
to 25 at 10: 00 am. After that, the graph
gradually
rose and by 4: 00 pm the deal reached 100.
However
, the graph
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showed
a significant drop again after 4: 00 pm and marked below 25. Till 9: 00 pm the diagram was fluctuating
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but
stayed
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just
below 25.

On the other hand
, the vending of
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coffee
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started
at 9: 00 am with a count of 25. From 10: 00 am onwards the sale
slowly
increased and between 2 and 3 pm it was
nearly
100.
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But
after 3 pm the sale decreased and reached below 25.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the sale of tea and coffee in Jules Beverage Stall at various times during the during day

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