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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. 1WxG
The above graph illustrates the range of polulation aged 65 and above in three different countries, between the years 1940 and 2040. In 1940, USA was top of the three countries with population aged 65 and over at 9. 5 percent. Followed by Sweden, which was at 6 percent and lastly Japan at 5 percent approx. While USA and Sweden’s population of senior citizens have increased gradually, the trend for Japan shows a downfall, continued by a linearity and constant growth thereafter. However Japan’s 65 and above population is expected to grow rapidly between 2020 and 2040. It is clearly noticible that the percentage of population aged 65 and over, have increased significantly. While the 65 and plus population of USA was the highest among the three in 1940, it is predicted to be the lowest by the year 2040, at about 23 percent. However Sweden remains on the second position in the list with 25 percent and Japan will be the top country with highest population of 65 and above citizens at 27 percent.
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graph illustrates the range of
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polulation
aged 65 and
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in three
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different
countries, between the years 1940 and 2040.

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population
aged 65 and over at 9. 5
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percent
. Followed by Sweden, which was at 6
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and
lastly
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Japan
at 5
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percent
approx.
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and Sweden’s
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population
of senior citizens have increased
gradually
, the trend for
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Japan
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a downfall, continued by a linearity and constant growth thereafter.
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However
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Japan’s
65 and
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above
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population
is
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expected
to grow
rapidly
between 2020 and 2040.

It is
clearly
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noticible
that the percentage of
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population
aged 65 and over, have increased
significantly
. While the 65 and plus
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population
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of USA
was the highest among the three in 1940, it
is predicted
to be the lowest by the year 2040, at about 23
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percent
.
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However
Sweden remains on the second position in the list with 25
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and
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Japan
will be the top country with
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highest
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population
of 65 and
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citizens at 27
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percent
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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